I felt my essay was very sound as far as structure and order goes. I re-arranged a few paragraphs in the end read when I realized they would function better that way. I did actually learn things while writing about the AIDS and HIV virus. I think that this will better help me to deal with any future situations that this may arise. I plan on becoming a nurse so the odds of meeting someone that is going to be HIV positive or does have full blown AIDS virus are going to be a lot higher than most people.
I do think that treating people different is wrong in all aspects. All people have the same feelings we each experience ourselves, and many people forget about that. I do feel really strongly about the everyone is equal thing. The only people that I exclude from that are the ones that really dont care to do anything with themselves. The people that doom themselves to negative outcomes. If you dont want to help yourself then my sympothy goes out the window. But, there I go again trying to get into a whole new topic. :)
Anyway...back to the rest of my thoughts on the first essay. I really think that the class as a whole did learn things and did quite well on their papers. I really liked the intros that were story based. I wish now that I tried to incorporate that more into mine but I wasnt having very much luck. I am better at giving you the facts wich can be good and bad.
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